i find solace at the foot
of the river where the
waters are placid and the
wind whistles a sermon
of lovely breezes taming the
thorns and thistles of
the wild timberland
i find my soul surrendering
at the arms of the branches
of sycamore trees
i am leaving a home where
children are not free to sketch
their imaginations and sing
their animated dreams
the nearness of you is a valid
judgment why i lay at your bosom
and find an antonym of calamity
trapped on your shoulders
2012
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“children not able to sketch their imaginations and sing their dreams” Wonderful use of words. I invite you to visit my blog. Have a good weekend!
thanks Barbara! yeah i’d love to visit your blog! π
I think you paint a wonderful image of loneliness and the solace one can find within the natural elements that just doesn’t exist in human society. For some reason, while I was reading this, I kept picturing myself standing at the edge of a lake somewhere on a secluded beach and just wanting to jump carelessly into the water. I know that’s a very vivid and specific image, but that’s how this poem made me feel–although, I’m not sure if that’s what you were trying to accomplish. All in all, great work and thanks for posting this!
Thanks for dropping-by and for leaving a comment that is encouraging and sincere! You made me smile today! π
The first verse of the poem reminded me of a Bruce Springsteen song (and that is a compliment, coming from me, as I admire his turn of phrase). So it feels like the poem starts with the bite and grime of the everyday… and then it soars high.
Hi MarinaSofia, that is a great compliment from you! Thanks so much! I hope you enjoyed this much! π
Strong images. The voice–from your line and punctuation choice–makes me think of monks chanting. Not quite flat. satisfying
thanks Barbara for dropping-by and for liking this! π
It was great! I can tell from this one poem, that you are a very talented writer.
~Natalie Noel from Author Fun
thanks Natalie! π
You’re welcome! π
~Natalie from Author Fun
A beautiful piece indeed..
thanks Sean for liking this! π
very strong poem
thanks for dropping-by and for liking this! π
Hey Chester. I have to say that I like your poems a lot. They are full of style and deep emotions, just like this one. So I want to encourage you to keep up this wonderful job.
By the way, Can you give me some recommendations on how to get more people to see my blog and read my poems? The blogging world is very new to me so I’ve been looking for some advices here and there…
Hi Jonathan, thanks for visiting my blog! Just have a huge list of followers and constantly post good stuff here! I hope you’ll enjoy blogging these days! Good Luck! π
Brilliant! The last stanza is as good or better than anything I’ve read in a long time. It is perfection.
Hi There! Thanks a lot! You made me smile this morning! π
Your words are perfectly kept in place. It is a great piece.
Thanks alot for dropping by my blog, I will make sure to check out ours for it seems promising π
you’re welcome Mennah and thanks to you, too! π