and
some people
hesitate
to walk
to run
instead
they hide
from the
covered
sidewalks
with thick
trees where
no one
can notice
others ask
why
yet
they can’t
find answers
and
the answers
are secretly
hiding
why
i ask
too
why
because
i’m also one
2014
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I think you might benefit from longer line lengths in some places like ‘from the covered sidewalks’ for instance
thanks for the suggestion 🙂
Not sure if your shift keys aren’t working lol but I think your non-capitalized poetry sets a good tone nonetheless. I’m liking what I see 🙂
i’ve personally and intentionally doing it 🙂
thanks by the way for liking it 🙂
I actually enjoyed how you’ve used short lines and the intentional non capitalization. It gives the poem a sense of universality and helps the reader feel identified with what you’re describing. At least that’s how I felt ! I loved it !
thanks Sylvia! 🙂
Great poetry I´ve been reading,glad you stumbled upon my blog.
Don’t mind the style mongers and find your own voice. 🙂 It’s a very sweet poem.
Well put, BookOfPain. I enjoy your poems, and I look forward to reading more!
thanks! 🙂