Part of you is
the me who always
hide under a name
that does not exist.
Part of you is
the someone who is
there when nobody
is really there.
Part of you is
the heart that
dwells to feel
thousand pretensions.
Part of you is
the song that
plays only when
no one is listening.
Part of you is
the road where
feet cannot walk
and they avoid.
Part of you is
the absence that
I always feel and
I feel no you.
2015
Hi. This is a great poem, but I want to read the last part as “I always feel when I feel no you” – it feels like it flows better. 🙂
Hello Jane. Thanks for the like and comment. Maybe what I want to convey in my last line when I wrote “I always feel AND I feel no you” is the constant feeling of someone else’s absence. Hope that makes sense with my use of the connector AND instead of WHEN 🙂
I really like this – it is a rare I read a piece that leaves me feeling so connected with the words, thank you for sharing
Thanks indeed 🙂
Nice work, from the beginning to end it pulled me in.
Thanks
Thank you! 🙂
This is actually so true..When one is not able to describe oneself..You have perfectly describe in words what can’t be done with feelings..Well deserved..Thanks…:)
Thanks so much! 🙂 I appreciate your awesome comment! 🙂
You well deserve it…:)
ohh 🙂
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thankyou for taking the time to view my poems and writings .ive just read some of yours very nice and very interesting.
you’re welcome and thank you likewise 🙂
Beautifully written! I like this part:
Part of you is
the someone who is
there when nobody
is really there.
It’s true.. sometimes we just feel like we’re alone, but we don’t! There’s always the part of you who is there for yourself haha Thanks for sharing! 🙂
I’m glad you liked this 🙂 thanks, by the way 🙂